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Last week,my father left home

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Last week,my father left home to work abroad for several days.I promised to take care of mom when saying goodbye. Tomorrow morning, I tried to wake up mother as usual,but she looked very tired.I went to her and touched her head swiftly,only to find that she was having a fever.So I prepared some medicine and drank her water with anxiety.To make sure her health condition is stable ,I checked her body temperature every half an hour. Two days later,mom could set up and take medicine on her own.In order to make her get well soon,I make some noodles for her.I saw tears shinning in her eyes,they were the symbol of happiness rather than tiredness. Yesterday,father came back home eventually.After knowing what I had done during last week,he praised me and said that he is very proud to have a son like me.As for me,I feel lucky to have a such warm family either.
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Last week,my father left home
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Last Monday,my father said goodbye to my mother and me and went on a business trip.
He would be away for three days.Juet the next morning.I found my mother wasn't feeling
well. She had a cold.I immediately went to get her some medicine and then prepared some
noodles for her. With my special care, my mother recovered quickly. When my father
came back home, my mother told him what had happened. He praised me for what I had done.
I feel very happy that I have done something for my mother.