求帮忙修改一下我的英语作文 语法错误啥的

求帮忙修改一下我的英语作文 语法错误啥的
“Why you always have so much expectations!” I slamed the door up as if it could make them months shut up and run away from that house where was full of cold and blame.The cold wind in the street blowed on my face like a knife and I sank through the floor.In my parents’ words,it sounded like I had no future anymore,I was so lazy and decadence that just like a pig for slaughter ,the final exam.Their requests and expectations was a heavy mountain on my back that I even could not breathe.
Walked in the deserted street hit or miss,I suddenly saw a familiar shadow --- Jason,the “king” in my primary school!My memory of childhood was blurry all the time but when I saw his face ,he recalled all the past to me.
Jason was a typical school bully in our primary school,fighted and blackmailed was normal thing for him.I was his deskmate and we were good friends in fact.He looked like didn't care about anything and I bet he never had a complete class.I have not seen him after graduating from the primary school.
I said hello to him,“ How are you recently?”
Jason looked at me as if i asked something embarrassing and a unknown emotion flashed from his eyes,“Hi,it’s been a long time.”
“You must have had a good time now.” I said,“ You are so bright in our perimary school .I remember those things all the time.”
Jason said,“No,in fact,I quited from school and work in a restaurant for a long time.”
I suddenly realized that maybe my primary school classmate did not live as good as I imagined.His clothes was shabby and his face was also older than our peers.
“Why you left school?” I asked.
“Oh,it is a long story.” Jason said,“Sometime I admire you to have such a responsible parents who concerned for you.”
“How can you think so!” I was really surprised,“ You can’t imagine how noisy they are!Trying to keep you studying all the time and give yo tasks endless.
“Shut up!” he roared to me and seemed mad that i can heard the hard,sharp thrusts of his breathing.We were in silence for a while and he stared at me in a nearly sympathetic manner.“You don't know what you have and how happy you are now!If my parents can’t educate me anything or just care about me ,I won’t be what I am now!”
Suddenly it was like a hand touched my heart,I realize that parents’ care and control was so rare that could lead me to the correct road.It was like the scissor pruned the askew branches.Maybe it would feel hurt but it could help you grow up higher.
“Thank you.” I said to Jason sincerely,for his roar and mention.
I turned and ran to go home.I know I must open that close door.

“Why you always have so much expectations!” I slammed the door as if it could make their mouths shut up and ran away from that house where was full of cold ness and blame.The cold wind in the street blew on my face like a knife and (I sank through the floor).In my parents’ words,it sounded like I had no future anymore,I was so lazy and decadent that i were a pig (for slaughter) .Their requests and expectations were just like a heavy mountain on my back which made me could not breathe.
Walking in the street,I suddenly saw a familiar figure --- Jason,the “king” in my primary school!My memory of childhood was blurry all the time but when I saw his face ,he recalled all the past to me.
Jason was a typical school bully in our primary school.Fights were the normal things for him.I was his deskmate and we were good friends in fact.He looked like didn't care about anything and I bet that he never had a complete class.I have not seen him after graduating from the primary school.
I said hello to him,“ How are you recently?”
Jason looked at me as if i asked something embarrassing and an unknown emotion flashed from his eyes,“Hi,it’s been a long time.”
“You must have had a good time now.” I said,“ You are so bright in our perimary school .I remember those things all the time.”
Jason said,“No,in fact,I quited from school and work in a restaurant for a long time.
I suddenly realized that maybe my primary school cl assmate did not live as good as I imagined.His clothes was shabby and his face was also older than ours.
“Why you leave school?” I asked.
“Oh,it is a long story.” Jason said,“Sometime I admire you to have such a responsible parents who concerned of you.”
“How can you think so!” I was really surprised,“ You can’t imagine how noisy they are!They try to keep you studying all the time and give you tasks endless.
“Shut up!” he roared at me and drove mad and i heard the hard,sharp thrusts of his breath.We were in silence for a while and he stared at me in a nearly sympathetic sight.“You don't know what you have and how happy you are now!If my parents had educated me anything or just care about me ,I wouldn't be what I am now!”
Suddenly it was like a hand touching my heart,I realized that parents’ care and control was so rare that could lead me to the correct road.It was like the scissor pruned the askew branches.Maybe it would difficult to obey but it could help you grow up .
“Thank you.” I said to Jason sincerely,for his roar and mention.
I turned back and ran home.I knew I must open that close door.
亲〜小错误太多了咯〜时态、过去时怎么写、大部分我都帮你改过了、还有一句用虚拟语气、括号的是我没看懂你的意思、还有一些搭配意思对的、但不这么用、自己改咯〜