求篇英语作文~写一个对你影响最深的人

求篇英语作文~
写一个对你影响最深的人

My beloved teacher
A good teacher is like a bright star shining in his or her students' hearts.Mr.Cheng,my first English teacher,is also the bright star shining in my heart.
when I started my learning in junior middle school,my English was poor and that really frustrated me.I abandoned myself.Besides,I was too shy to answer the teacher's questions in the class and finally Mr.Cheng got to know that.He began to help me with my lessons and also encouraged me at the same time.He said:don't be afraid,in fact you're really excellent!Believe in yourself and don't hold a gloomy view on your own abilities!From then on,I changed my mind on English and I had made a great progress later.
I have left Mr.Cheng for several (three) years,and I have never seen him.I think I have benefited from him for a lot.For example,he gave me confidence,made me stay calm and so on.I think he is a star shining in my way to success.and I will never forget him,never!
翻译：我敬爱的老师
一位好老师就像是他或者她学生心里的一颗闪耀的明星（明亮的星星）一样.程老师,我的第一任英语老师,也像是一颗星星一样在我的心里闪耀着.
当我刚开始进入初中学习的时候,我的英语很差劲.而且这也令我非常沮丧.我几乎都想放弃自己了.而且,我在课堂上由于太害羞而不敢回答老师们的提问.当程老师了解到了这些以后,他开始给我补课,同时也在鼓励我,他说,别怕,实际上你很优秀,要相信自己,千万不要怀疑自己的能力.从那时起,我就改变了对英语的看法,而且后来取得了很大的进步.
我离开程老师已经几年(三年）了,而且我之后也没有再见到他.但是,我却在他身上学到了很多.比如,他教会了我自信,沉着.我想他真的是我成功路上的一颗明星.我也不会忘掉他,
（翻译在语序和语义上可能有些调动.）
今天我能上网,所以立刻给你写了一篇.不知道好不好,合不合你的心意.但我希望你可以拿给你的英语老师看看,毕竟人家是专业的出身,也可以给我批改一下啊.我给你提个建议：写英语作文,首先要学会写身边的人和事.这样,文章才会真实,也就是“有血有肉”.我觉得写身边的事个容易令阅卷老师相信.千万不要抄阅读理解和完形填空,这样你会冒作文零分的危险.不要用长句子,如果非要这样写,那就尽量写成短句子.里面不要用深奥的语法和俚语.尽量用一些课本上出现的短语和句子.平时要多练,可以培养语感.还有就是,写完一篇文章一定要让英语学的好的同学或老师看一遍,因为不管你认为你写的有多好,你的作文中绝对会有或多或少的错误,这样他们都会及时的给你一些帮助.记住,一定要多问问.这样,你才会有提高.