英语作文求修改My mother is a seamstress.She is forty-five-years-old

英语作文求修改
My mother is a seamstress.She is forty-five-years-old,but she has a young heart.We are not only motherand daughter but also we are friends.I often tell her about my troubles andshe also tells me that she saw those novelty things.
She is short,thin and beautiful,with long,brown hair.She has big,black eyes,and herlips of a ruby red.She likes attention to fashion,but because of her heightreasons,may pretty clothes she isn’t able to wear,so she often complains tome.
She is friendly,easy-going and warm-hearted.She always helps those people who have difficult,even they never meet.So I’m very worried for her safety.She is hard-workingand responsible.She does things neatly and never sloppily.She is aperfectionist.If things aren’t looking so good,she would have modified untilsatisfied.She likes to listen to English pronunciation,because she feels goodto hear.She also had some time trying to learn English,but finally she didn’tstick to it.
To sum up,Iadmire my mum because she is open-minded and she knows her own mind.In thefuture,I want to be like her.

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My mother is a seamstress.She is forty-five {years old},but she has a young heart.We are not only mother and daughter but {we are also} friends.I often tell her about my troubles and she also tells me that {all those novel things she saw}.
years old不用加"-"
but also we are =>we are also
novellty 是名词,在things前要改成形容词novel,文句次序亦改了下才通顺
She is short,thin and beautiful,with long,brown hair.She has big,black eyes,and lips of a ruby red.She likes [to pay] attention on fashion,but because of her height,[there are not](may=>many) pretty clothes [that] she {can} wear.{Therefore.} she often complains to me.
her删除,主因是前面有she has..後面跟her lips就成病句了~
She likes attention to fashion 改成了She likes [to pay] attention on fashion.一下子从自恋狂变回了正常人,当然..假如事实是.
able换成can
She is friendly,easy-going and warm-hearted.She always helps those people who have [difficult=>difficulties],even they {had never met before}.So I’m very worried for her safety.She is hard-working and responsible.She does things neatly and never sloppily.She is a perfectionist.If things {were not} looking good [enough],she would have [them] modified until satisfied.She likes to listen to English pronunciation,because she feels good to hear [them].She also had {tried learning English sometimes ago},but finally,she didn’t stick to it.
difficult=>difficulties 形容词改成名词...
其他都是动词时态上的修缮及句子宾语补充