麻烦有英语好的帮我改改作文吧,我语法不好,估计错误会很多~

麻烦有英语好的帮我改改作文吧,我语法不好,估计错误会很多~
There is a heated discussion nowadays as to the issue of study into groups is better or not.Those who welcome this trend contend that it will bring about numerous benefits,while people who object to this trend hold that it will rise to number of risks.Personally,I side with the former one.
People who think that students should organized into groups to study believe that discussion with partners can exchange different information,ideas and can solve difficult problems together.They claimed that study alone can make students sleepy and make study boring.However in groups you can tell your classmates your opinion and absorb other valuable ideas to enrich your knowledge and information.With more kinds of information,study may become an interesting thing rather than a boring thing.
While,there are still many people stand against the view above-mentioned.They argue that study alone is the best method to study,it can provide a more quiet circumstance to think deeply.They also believe that study may become a big party while studying in groups.So study without disturbance can be more effective on students’study.
From the above discussion,we can easily conclude that both proponents and opponents of study into groups have their respective reasons and justifications.However,as a university student I still prefer to study into groups.You can not only study,but also have more communications with your classmates and make more friends when study into groups.The circumstance is more relax in groups and may arouse students’interest in learning.With this method study may become a comfortable thing to do.So I cherish the unshakable belief that study into groups is more effective.

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There is a heated discussion nowadays as to (the issue of study into groups) whether the study group is better or not.Those who welcome this trend contend that it will bring about numerous benefits,while people who object to this trend hold that (it will rise to) there will be a number of risks.Personally,I side with the former (one).
People who think that students (should organized) should be organized into groups to study believe that discussion (with)among partners (can exchange) can be helpful in exchanging different (information,ideas) information and ideas,and (can solve) solving difficult problems together.They (claimed) claim that (study) studying alone can make students sleepy and make study boring.However (in groups) when (study) studying in a group you can tell your classmates your (opinion) opinions and absorb other valuable ideas to enrich your knowledge (and information).With more kinds of information,study may become an interesting thing rather than a boring thing.
(While,there) There are still many people (stand) against the view (above-mentioned) mentioned above (or above-mentioned view).They argue that studying alone is the best method to study,(it can) as it can provide a (more quiet) quieter circumstance( to think ) for one to think deeply.They also believe that( study may become a big party while studying in groups) a study group may become a big party.So study without disturbance can be more effective on students'study.
From the above discussion,we can easily conclude that both proponents and opponents of study groups have their respective reasons and justifications.However,as a university student I still prefer (to) study groups.You (can) not only can study,but also have more communications with your classmates and make more friends when (study) studying into groups.The (circumstance) atmosphere is more (relax) relaxing in groups and may arouse students'interest in learning.With this method study may become a comfortable thing to do.So I cherish the unshakable belief that (study) studying in groups is more effective.