求大神给改正下.英语作文.Good morning,honorable teachers.I appreciate yo

求大神给改正下.英语作文.Good morning,honorable teachers.I appreciate your kindness in giving me an opportunity for the interview.My name is ChenLifeng from the city of Ningde.I am a fresh graduate from City Institute of Dalian University of Technology.I majored in Java software development.During my four-year learning in the university ,I always do things seriously practical ,bear hardships and work hard.I have ambition and passion for life .Therefore ,my professional score always ranks among the top three in my grade and I’m working as the group leader of all kinds of professional practices .In addition to this,I passed CET4 ,CET6 and Nationwide Software Technology Test.However,I clearly understand that these are far from enough.There are many things I need to improve .I sincerely hope that I can learn from teachers in the next few years and obtain your precious instruction and guidance.In my spare time ,I like reading,traveling and playing badminton.I want to learn various aspects of knowledge as well as principles on how to bear myself by reading .I also want to broaden my horizon ,enrich my life experience and appreciate various humanistic sensibilities .Playing badminton strengths not only my physical fitness but also mind.So I believe my abilities and qualities .And I ’m very confident and determined to study in this school.Of course there’s a lot I don’t understand and I hope that I can seek advice from all of the teachers afterwards.There are several reasons for my choi

Good morning,honorable(//dear就够了,我觉得.honorable太过了) teachers（//单数）.（//先介绍自己?） I appreciate your kindness in giving me an opportunity for the interview.My name is ChenLifeng from the city of Ningde.I am a fresh graduate from City Institute of Dalian University of Technology with majoring in Java software development.
During my four-year learning in the university (college life) ,I always do(did) things seriously practical ,bear hardships and work hard.I have ambition and passion for life(//不带这么夸自己的啊,可以说说你对他们公司有多么敢兴趣) .Therefore ,my professional score always ranks(//ed) among the top three in my grade and I’m(//was) working as the group leader of all my relavant professional projects.In addition to this,I passed CET4 ,CET6 and Nationwide Software Technology Test.However,I clearly understand that these are far from enough(//夸自己过了点).There are many things I need to improve .I sincerely hope that I can learn from teachers in the next few years and obtain your precious instruction and guidance.In my spare time ,I like reading,traveling and playing badminton.I want to learn various aspects of knowledge as well as principles on how to bear myself by reading .I also want to broaden my horizon ,enrich my life experience and appreciate various humanistic sensibilities .Playing badminton strengths not only my physical fitness but also mind.So I believe my abilities and qualities .And I ’m very confident and determined to study in this school.Of course there’s a lot I don’t understand and I hope that I can seek advice from all of the teachers afterwards.
//建议.结构稍微清晰点.3段式.第一段感谢和介绍下自己.第二段.专业能力.最好是能介绍下projects（practices ）你做过的.第三段,自己兴趣爱好.计算机的话,我觉得最好是有关专业.
//不带这么没有根据的夸自己的.会显得很arrogent.夸自己 最好带上依据.比如你在什么什么project上负责什么什么.be professional,be yourself.不要像是一片政府官员的 空话段子.
//最好是直接点.你对他们什么什么敢兴趣.你的专业能力如何相关他们的东西.
//计算机的 都喜欢直接点的.说白了就是编程能力和经历.
//要说的不好见谅.忠言逆耳.
再问： 是帮别人写的，我也不太懂。以前没有写过。麻烦您啦