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帮忙修改下我的英语哈,题目是《Smoking should be banned in all public areas》

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帮忙修改下我的英语哈,题目是《Smoking should be banned in all public areas》
《Smoking should be banned in all public areas》
I strongly believe that smoking should bebanned in all public areas
Why?
Because smoking is aof wastes money as well as affects our health and peoplewho have asthma can be harmed or even killed if they want to take a walk in thepark and if smoking was banned,then heart-related illnesses could possiblylower just like it did in the places where it was banned.I wouldn’t like towalk past a smoker that has a cigarette in his mouth because I wouldn’t like tobreath in the smoke and Second-hand smoke is just as bad as smoking.So I wishsmoking was banned.
帮忙修改下我的英语哈,题目是《Smoking should be banned in all public areas》
语法错误先不考虑的话,文章中关于希望禁烟的理由,没有能够非常有条理的说清楚,部分原因不合逻辑.不好意思比较直接点出来,因为三分之二的句子都需要进行部分改动,你是不是想表达下面的意思:
1、抽烟浪费钱,有害健康,举例:哮喘病人、降低患心血管类疾病概率
2、抽烟的人有口臭,影响交际.举例:不喜欢靠近抽烟的人,身上有怪味.
结论:希望禁烟
再问: 那你重新修改下= =
再答: 我改就等于帮你重新写了……

《Smoking should be banned in all public areas》

I strongly agreed that smoking should be banned in public areas. Here are my reasons.

First of all, smoking is a waste of money, and harm to our health. people with asthma will have a bigger chance to get worse if they are frequently exposed to second hand smoke.

Also, smoking people are more likely to suffer from heart-related illnesses, which is verified by many scientific evidence now.

Secondly, long term smokers often have stink breath. No one likes stink people. For example, most of the friends I know do not like to be friends with people who always has a cigarette on the mouth. Everytime I walk by smoking people, I could always smell his bad breath, which is really annoying.

So I wish smoking could be banned in the public and we can live in a free-second-hand-smoke world.

我写得好累,再也不答作文题了……还不见得写得好……
再问: 嗯。就你了,O(∩_∩)O谢谢